Myself900字大纲作文

hi!I'm Zhao Ziwen. I was a happy useI had a happy ,I'm very very sad my dad isn't health. he drinks alcohol every is angry every mom is sad, I grow up can't drink alcohol,I can't! I'm only 13 old,but I'm clever.I have a noble dream! I want go America!I want to go to havord!I'm confident!HaHa! My birthday is in July. I love building favorite food is hamburger! I want have a look the very very large world!

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Hi! I'm Zhao birthday is in July. I love building blocks. My favorite food is hamburgers!

I was a happy boybecause I had a happy I'm very very sad my dad isn't drinks alcohol every is angry every mom is sad,too. I won't drink alcohol when I grow up. I won't!

I'm only 13 years old, but I'm clever. I have a noble dream! I want to go to America!I want to go to Harvard! I'm confident! HaHa!

I want have a look the world. The very very large world!

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